EyeScream
Our little girl has grown up so fast! Can you believe this is really happening?!
I can hardly remember the days when she was young. The only memory that surfaces now is the time when she had cut off all of her hair. I was so upset with her! I shouldn’t have yelled at her the way I did, though. I regret that now. I regret it all now.
I’ll be the first to admit, I wasn’t the greatest father. I wish I was around more, but my job demanded so much of my time. I wish she could see that I was only trying to provide for you and her. I only wanted the best for you both. I know it was difficult on you, raising her alone. I know she demanded more attention than it was possible for you to give. I don’t blame you for all the arguments; I know bringing her up was strenuous. Now your body suffers for it. I am truly sorry.
She needed me! She needed her father! I wish I would have enjoyed being a father while I still had the chance.
She has your beautiful green eyes. She lays them on the table, then begins to dig out mine.
Taut, odd and very well-written, nice work.
Comment by Leehughes — July 30, 2009 @ 1:25 am
Thanks goodness that my son doesn’t have my eyes.
Comment by BrianBarnett — July 30, 2009 @ 2:26 pm
A nice, catchy title, followed by a lesson to all parents to be more attentive… Good stuff, William. I hope the girl’s got enough eyes to see her through the week, now. Cheers, John.
Comment by John Saxton — July 30, 2009 @ 2:34 pm
Extremely high creep factor – nice story!
Comment by Bob Eccles — July 30, 2009 @ 3:06 pm
Thank you Lee, Brian, John and Bob! Glad you enjoyed it…
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Comment by wpauleyIII — July 30, 2009 @ 4:33 pm
Out there. Leaves a lot to interpretation, something I like in a tale. Good job.
Comment by joshua scribner — July 30, 2009 @ 7:19 pm
…and thank you Mr. Scribner!
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Comment by wpauleyIII — August 3, 2009 @ 11:29 am
Nice. So subtle until the end and wham! Well done. Thank you!
Comment by suzie bradshaw — August 5, 2009 @ 7:11 pm
Thank you Ms. Bradshaw!!!
Comment by wpauleyIII — August 5, 2009 @ 8:26 pm